[I have mentioned before that I have found a writing group. I went last night and there was an exercise to write a story one line at a time with another person based on the first line, in this case “Alone in the dark” this is what we came up with. It’s not what I would have done on my own but it’s not bad I think. I think I have a penchant for creepy, I Would love some feedback.]
Alone in the dark she sits as the wind rattled against the side of the building
She stood there, not knowing where she was.
Looking around the room, she spots a light coming from inside of the wardrobe
Slowly she walked towards the wardrobe not knowing what she would find in there
Reaching out for the handle, her arms begin to shake as the light inside dies away.
Taking a deep breath, she paused, to consider whiter to run or open the door.
“get yourself together, it’s all in your head” she mumbles to herself as she yanks the door open.
looking into the wardrobe she was surprised to find nothing but an empty void.
Leaning forward into the void, she reaches her hand into it, when something brushes past her leg.
This was accompanied by a blast of cold air that seem to come from the back of the wardrobe
Sending chills running down her spine, she lets out a scream of shock as much as terror as she stumbles back
Looking back at the wardrobe the Light suddenly reappeared, bright but somehow in the distance.
Stealing her nerves, she walks back up to the, now, blinding light emanating. A deep horrifying voice howls “You’re mine now” as a demonic hand grabs her by the wrist and pulls her screaming into the void.
Sounds fun! You get a great story too!
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I showed it to someone the other day and they said they can tell I didn’t write all of it as in places the writing and grammar isn’t right
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Just read it again and I know what the problem is. One of you was using past tense and one was using present.
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You’re right. I was using present I had the first and last line the other guy had every second one
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Easy fix at least. And now you know to watch for it when you do it again.😊
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That’s a good point.
Although you do know I’m the world’s worst for flipping between them
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Eh, I think we all do it. You get into a story and just flip back and forth. Lol
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Yeah probably.
I think i have done it a lot in the first chapter of the second book I started ages ago that I posted last night
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Im planning on reading that soon.😊 Right now I got my pc back and am going through it to make sure it’s really fixed. The motherboard was crap so they switched it.
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Yay you got it back. Hope you didn’t lose everything
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Thankfully, I didn’t but it’s being wonky. Just shut down on me a second ago, like I wasn’t using it.
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That’s not so good. Might be doing updates
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Hope so, my warranty is up in a few days and it would suck if they didnt really fix it. Next time I’m going with Dell again. Had my old one for 7yrs with no problems at all. Freakin crap electronics!
Anywho I’m glad to see your getting on with your writer playmates. ☺
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What you got now?
It was interesting anyway will see how it goes
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HP.
I’m jealous!
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I have a Toshiba good laptop.
You should set one up 😱👍🏻
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I was offered a great job out of the blue, so I’m not sure how much I’ll have time for. Plus I’m a social woosie. Lol
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Oh a job that’s great. You taking it?
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Yes. I get to set my hours around the kids schedule, its too perfect not to. Plus, I havent had a “job” in over ten years. Its about time to get some experience back on my resume. Lol
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That’s awesome. What you going to be doing
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Filing and computer entry. The company is trying to go electronic to keep better track of everything.
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That sounds incredibly dull but congratulations
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Probably. I also have a strange love for putting things in their place, so it works for me.
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Well that’s great I’m. Happy for you
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Thank you! 🤡
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Aaaaaaarrrrrrggggghhhhh an evil clown. RRRRUUUUNNNNN
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Hes nice.
He just wants to watch you sleep.
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Do you want me to have nightmares?
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Ooh, you wake up to a clown putting makeup on your face chanting….one of us… one of us…
Hahahaha Im told nightmares are good for the imagination. Lol
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You Kira my friend are evil. EVIL
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Ah thank you, thank you very much. *bows
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I hate clowns.
But I do want to see IT
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I never even saw the old one. Might see the new. Its supposed to be good I hear.
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All the reviews are really good. I recently read the book (well listened to the audio book ) and I want to see the film. I’ve been trying to find the original but can’t get hold. Of it
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Of It. You clever boy Lol!
Im surprised netflix hasn’t run it through their menus. Maybe they dont have the rights.
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😁😁
I’m surprised too. It’s on amazon but not paying for it. I didn’t realise it’s a 2 part mini series and not an full film
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Me either.
I’m wanting to see Geralds Game. The trailers look good.
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Oh I haven’t seen anything for that one
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Its Stephen’s as well.
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Oh yeah that one. I remember now
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Well Ill talk again later. Its dishes and grub time. Yay! 😐
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Have fun. It’s bed time for me any2
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